Triumph! Triumph! Triumph!

I’ve actually managed to transform the pre-love-love-scene into something that’s actually quite nice: instead of Amy being miffed at Fox stopping, they are now both fighting valiantly against the lust which devours them alive. And gnaws at them like a wild beast. Hmhm. 🙂

3 thoughts on “Triumph! Triumph! Triumph!

  1. The Tudor Rose

    In terms of intensity, though, are you building up to something? ‘Cuz if you are, the gnawing simile should probably come first in the text, followed by the devouring. If that’s already the case, sorry, but I can’t get the pic big enough to actually read your revisions.

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